Brooke Remmert
Oct. 5, 2009
College Prep- 6th hour
The Daring Rescue
This is an epic tale of how two mice and a mole decided to embark on a courageous journey to find the secret that lied outside the cellar doors, and to save their best friend.
Once upon time, in a place not far away, there lived three mice and a wise, old mole. Together they lived in a wine cellar below a restaurant. It was an old cellar of about sixty years, and was surprisingly strong, stable and in very good condition. It was a wonderful place for any rodent to live, all except for the owner of the restaurant. Rumor had it, that he had a strong dislike for mice, or rodents of any kind. If he ever came across a rodent, it was said that he would kill them dead on the spot. No rodent, no matter how brave, would ever dare to cross his path.
One day, when the three mice were sitting down at their table for breakfast, the wise old mole came up and asked, “May I join you?”
The mice welcomed him with open arms, and they sat down to have a lovely morning feast together. While enjoying their meal, the three mice asked the wise old mole, “What is beyond the cellar doors?”
Now the wise old mole had been around for years and had seen many accidents occur outside the doors. The wise old mole then replied, “Outside those cellar doors is a whole different world, filled with anger and menace! The rodents are swept away and never seen again.”
This frightened the mice, but at the same time made them very curious as to whether the mole was telling the truth or not. One brave mouse by the name of Ernie doubted the mole and proceeded to make his way to the cellar doors. “I’m gonna see this world all for myself,” Ernie announced. Ernie, although very brave, was very unintelligent. As soon as he crawled out that door, he was swept up by an unknown object of death, filled with big straw bristles and a long wooden shaft. The two other mice, Juanita and Francis, were in shock that they had just lost one of their best friends.
“Oh no!” cried Juanita.
“He’s gone!” Francis yelled.
Juanita and Francis had now been warned, and knew that if the ever walked out those doors, they would never come back, but they had to save their friend. The mole went on to tell them many more stories of all the friends that he had lost over the years, but Juanita and Francis didn’t care. They were going to do whatever it took to get their friend back.
Juanita and Francis were horrified when they heard this news. “Where will we go?” Juanita asked. “We’ll be killed if we don’t escape!” So after hearing of this tragedy, the mice and the mole started brainstorming on how to save Ernie. The first plan was to begin digging to tunnel their way through the walls and floor, to retrieve Ernie. This soon came to a halt when they ran into three feet of concrete. After many other attempts and many more failures, they knew that the only place to reach him was through the cellar doors. After the mole had drawn up a very detailed and elaborate sketch, the mice had very little faith in the mole and knew that this was probably the end for Ernie… and possibly them.
So the day finally arrived. The mice and mole were going to put their plan into action. After one more review of the rescue plan, they knew that it was “go time”. The mice and mole made a mad dash for the door, and as soon as it opened all three were swept up and placed in a box. Still alive, they had no idea what was going to happen next. They were scared and had little hope left.“Oh my goodness! Where are we? How will we get out?” Francis panicked.
Suddenly, the box was then emptied into a large metal container. Here, Juanita and Francis were greeted by a familiar face. It was Ernie! It turned out that all the rodents that had ever been captured by the restaurant owner had been saved for his eight-year-old grandson, who would keep them as pets. He was very responsible and would make sure that they always had food, water, and the other necessities of life.
This story may sound “cheesy”, but it’s an easy way to remind you to keep your friends close, no matter how tough it gets.
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Story is put together well. I like how your story has a good message to keep in mind in it.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story. The moral is very good at the end and the characters are very entertaining.
ReplyDeleteI like how you described the broom through the characters' eyes as an unknown object of death, filled with big straw bristles and a long wooden shaft! Great story!
ReplyDeletehaha.."cheesy"..mice..i get it. overall, it was a great story. I loved the names and your descriptions were excellent.
ReplyDeleteI liked the part in italics at the very beginning. :) I thought it was an interesting way to begin your story. Good job!
ReplyDeleteVery well written...the names were very creative
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